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( Till human voices wake us and we drown )
( Little pieces everywhere... )
EDIT - I made small, fine-tuning after posting right before "I let go." in an early part.
( Mecchen House - click here )
I wound up with around 19,400 or so. I trimmed just a little out, stuff I felt was redundant or didn't work well when reading it back over. Also I had a few odd, half-sentences I apparently didn't delete when I made some changes. Those are corrected. Oh btw, about the chapter title - the space in "Mecchen" is not a typo. I meant to do that.
( A lot of text in this post... )
I really took a good while on this chapter. Apologies there. But I'm hopeful with this next one because it has a much clearer structure in my mind leading along into the ending. Hope you enjoy this chapter though! ^_^
( Ami! In the garden! With the chocolate pipe! )
I wound up really taking a lot of stuff out of this chapter to keep the continuity righ. But I'm glad (thought this is a pretty laid-back chapter) that this one has some really nice moment and I think it really gives certain characters like Katsumi and Mami a fair shake. I hope you all enjoy it. The 2nd part will follow in just a minute.
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